The Official Writing Challenge
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04/17/08
An excellent, emotional prayer written from the heart of a prodigal son.
04/18/08
Your heart's prayer for your dad shines through loud and clear!

To give your poetry a better flow, spend some time on establishing a consistent meter.

I enjoyed that you rhymed "love" with "shove"--great juxtaposition.
04/19/08
This is my prayer for my father-in-law. You captured the heart's cry.
04/21/08
This prayer could be for so many of our loved ones. Thank you for sharing your heart with us and for allowing us to pray it with you.
04/21/08
Very sweet poem. I loved the "little shove" line. Nice job.
04/23/08
You put your heart's cry into a poem that lets the reader see very honestly and tenderly the desire you want fulfilled. I pray your dad has that moment to ask for Jesus' loving grace. Blessings to you for sharing your heart.
04/23/08
This is wonderful! I loved the heartfelt tenderness that came across here, and I especially liked your second verse, it just seemed to fit really well. Great job! ^_^
I sure hope that your father will come to know the Lord. What a great prayer.

Thank you so much for sharing this heartfelt poem.
04/24/08
Very good writing, Becky! I'll be praying for your dad.
I was perusing some older stories and came across this and it really touched my heart. I couldn't help but wonder if since you first wrote this have there been little answers to your prayers. You really grabbed my heart with this one. :)