The Official Writing Challenge
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04/17/08
When you reach the 50th year, you now have these golden memories written down as a Memorial of a wonderful father. Excellent writing.
04/17/08
This has good pacing: suspense, climax, resolution. A good read.

Be careful of cliches: beehive of activity...couldn't get my mind around it...glass half full...Your writing will be more compelling without these kinds of well-known phrases.

Thanks for this entry!
04/19/08
I liked how you chronicled the passage of the days and what you remembered/thought about--it captured the feel. Well done!
Thank you for sharing this beautiful, yet difficult story of treasured memories.
I was so sad at the irony of him making it only just past the 72 hours, and glad that you had loving family to give gentle, Godly guidance through the grieving process.
04/24/08
Congratulations on your 1st place. I really like the way you go through each of the days in paragraph form. Very good writing. The last paragraph is wonderful.