The Official Writing Challenge
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04/12/08
Nice sentiments from a grandmorther, not a very good flow as poetry though. Noticed several typos but the intent was there, keep growing and keep writing.
04/12/08
This would be good for the topic of "granddaughter" with some editing. Very sweet.
I enjoyed this.

I don't know a lot about poetry, so I can't comment much on that aspect of it. I will say that parts of the rhythm seemed off, but I was not focused on that. Instead, I was more focused on the sweet words that were coming forth from this darling piece.

I saw this as working with grandmother or granddaughter as the topic. It all depends on what perspective you want to look at it from.

Thank you for sharing.
04/15/08
A lovely tribute to your grandmother, whether or not the poem was written as from YOUR grandmother to you, or was written BY a grandmother to her little granddaughter, it is nicely worded. You have talent. I'm glad you are using it.
04/16/08
Beautiful thoughts. This has a very peaceful feel to it, almost as if I were holding a baby and caressing her head.