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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Grandparent(s) (04/03/08)

TITLE: The Perfect Little Girl
By Jennifer Wetter
04/10/08


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Her she lies so gently in my arms
Already she’s won my heart with her simple girlish charm
Her eyes slowly open to the big old world outside
So softly wrapped in the tears she’s already cried
My hand so tenderly caresses her beautiful face
My heart yearns that this little angel will in this world find her place
That she will run amongst the flowers and the fields that lay before
That heart will open and seek you as her Savior
Into the arms of heaven I pray this little girl will climb
Into the arms of Jesus her little heart will find
Everyday that goes by my little granddaughter; you’re always on my heart
Even thought between the miles, we are never truly far apart
Our lives are simply divided between just a few simple years
Our lives are intertwined my our laughter and our tears
You’re life is just beginning, my life is nearing its end
By you are still my little granddaughter, a truly special godsend
Though the years of life quickly fade so fast
My past becomes your future; your future becomes my past
The perfect little girl I see before my very eyes
Around you the sun will set and the moon will rise
Although my special little one I must request
And I pray you learn to love the Lord and always do your best
In your heart to always be strong and to always be true
No matter what remember I will always love you
The perfect little girl created with such love
A perfect blend of hope, heart and a touch of heaven from above
Throughout our lives we will always journey together
For you my dear are my granddaughter forever


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c clemons04/12/08
Nice sentiments from a grandmorther, not a very good flow as poetry though. Noticed several typos but the intent was there, keep growing and keep writing.
Marilyn Schnepp 04/12/08
This would be good for the topic of "granddaughter" with some editing. Very sweet.
Joshua Janoski04/13/08
I enjoyed this.

I don't know a lot about poetry, so I can't comment much on that aspect of it. I will say that parts of the rhythm seemed off, but I was not focused on that. Instead, I was more focused on the sweet words that were coming forth from this darling piece.

I saw this as working with grandmother or granddaughter as the topic. It all depends on what perspective you want to look at it from.

Thank you for sharing.
Helen Dowd 04/15/08
A lovely tribute to your grandmother, whether or not the poem was written as from YOUR grandmother to you, or was written BY a grandmother to her little granddaughter, it is nicely worded. You have talent. I'm glad you are using it.
Patty Wysong04/16/08
Beautiful thoughts. This has a very peaceful feel to it, almost as if I were holding a baby and caressing her head.