The Official Writing Challenge
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03/14/08
This had a genuine nostalgic feel to it.

There were some extraneous bits--if this were tightened up a bit, you'd have more room for character and plot development.

Cute little tag at the end.
03/15/08
Cute entry. Enjoyed the detail you put in. Would have loved a bit more. Enjoyed this.
03/15/08
Not exactly on target, Topic-wise; but a nice story, family orientated, a togetherness type family and written very well. Good job.