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Oh, how sad. I felt these characters, and I hope it's not too late!

Watch out for some occasional inconsistent tenses.

Very good job of character development.
Good characterization, especially of the boy. I definitely felt for him, and the parents. Keep writing.
Thank you for an optomistic conclusion. I like how both mother and son were keenly aware of the remaining time, and that the dad was willing to yield to the mom's wise discernment.
Great story, and right on topic. You wrote a lot of emotion into your characters, and told this story well. The little details you inserted add depth. You've got a few minor grammar problems, but your writing shows a lot of promise. Good job!