The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/08
Ouch, I wasn't expecting that ending. Big ouch. Well done.
03/15/08
Very strong message - and convicting to all of us, I think. Good job.
03/16/08
Good little twist at the end. You may want to break up some of the longer paragraphs of dialogue, I think that would help your reader. But good point in your story, we all can get too caught up in our work no matter what the job. Thanks for sharing.
WOW Tracy, you hit with a hammer's force with that ending. Well done, very well done. Right on topic!
03/17/08
Very nicely done! Great illustration of the topic - with BOTH characters, too! Well written, and the lesson is very convicting.
03/19/08
I loved your description of time and how easy it is to spend,fill, and waste, so true. On topic,but no happy ending, sigh!
03/19/08
Well done and right on topic...good job.
Absolutely loved the ending-the dying praying for the living to live!! Keep up the good words.
03/19/08
So sad! I really felt for both sisters, especially the prayer at the end, that was truly heartfelt, I really did feel sad. It gave me goosebumps reading about everything she had all put together and then to have a crushing blow of six months left to live? Wow. That is something completely new-in this perspective. Great job! ^_^