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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Make Hay While the Sun Shines" (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (03/06/08)

TITLE: Daylight Savings Time
By Paul Potenza
03/09/08


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Daylight Savings Time was here.

It was time to spring forward but all that meant to him was that he'd lose an hour's sleep.

He'd been sleeping in the guest room for over two years now, ever since his bride of 25 tears had gotten sick. She needed to get her rest and even though she was small, she needed to stretch out and travel the whole bed to get comfortable.

So yeah, he was tired when he got up. He noticed the darkness of the morning even before the rooster crowed but he knew that it was because he was now an hour ahead.

He got up and and put the coffee on. He checked on his beloved and then tended to what needed to be done. As the first slug of hot black coffee hit him he was slopping the hogs. Old "Bessie" mooed impatiently waiting for him to milk her. He obliged and then fed the 218 million stray cats that wandered the farm. His good ol dog was right by his side. He went back in and fed and watered the dog.

Today was Sunday so he knew that he got to go to church. It meant a three mile walk but he was only 55 years old and it sure was pleasant to see his brothers and sisters in the faith. "Time well spent." is what he said to himself as he trudged along feeling the sun warm his face like a kiss from God. His muscles relaxed and he fell into stride like he had a thousand years ago when he had been a Marine on a forced march. He smiled gently to himself when he recollected the words of Larry the Cable Guy. "Git 'er DONE."

So he went and he talked with his brothers and sisters and he cried with them about their problems and laughed with them about their joys and then he started the walk home.

There were still a lot of chores to do (that fence still had to be mended and the bride needed to be tended to) but everything seemed to be lighter. The sun stayed out a little longer and he even got a chance to speak to his ornery old neighbor who for once had a couple of good things to say. (Old Dave could be a handfull, the old cuss.) Still, in all, he was happy to be alive.

As he walked up to the house, ol' Rocky bounded out to greet him barking his brains out. Not bad for a dog of 18 years. His bride was standing at the screen door with a smile on her face and a cup of tea in her pretty little hands. She never looked better.

And a thought occurred to him. He could probably do this for another day.

After all...

Daylight Savings Time was here.


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Fiona Dorothy Stevenson03/13/08
Another day .... Same old, same old ... It's good to know sometimes routines have a reward. God bless you.
Jan Ackerson 03/13/08
A very sweet and precious slice of life.

Watch your punctuation a bit, and think about a way to introduce a bit of conflict, to pull your readers along.

I still haven't caught up from Daylight Saving Time last week...
Joanne Sher 03/14/08
I like this little "slice of life" - I was right there. I would have loved more details. A delightful little piece. Thanks for sharing it.
Jeffrey Snell03/14/08
Earthy and warm writing. You captured the weariness of your character and his sensations of God lifting him very plainly, yet beautifully.
Marilyn Schnepp 03/16/08
I liked the 218 million cats (give or take a million) and the thousand years ago in the Marine Corps; obviously a bit of an "embellisher" when it comes to details, right? Neat story, down to earth and understood by even the most common of minds...like mine. (Unlike a poetic form I just read that I could not make heads or tails of) Nice Job!