The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful story! Loved the ending. Great love "shown" here and not "told".
This is lovely - I could picture the scene very vividly. Nicely done.
Great title, and a wonderful story.

The first part was great with the "showing"--the second part had lovely action, but was a bit "telling."

The bits with the "universal language" were awesome, and I could very easily envision the clinic and the people in it. Nice job!
This was well written. I was fully engaged throughout the story and loved the ending.
Vivid descriptions. Keep writing.
Great job, great story and you told it wonderfully. Only one thing, people never go to be angels in heaven. Other than that it was on topic and a great read.
Such a beautiful, touching story with a loving "action-filled" type of story with love of neighbor. Your Title was Right On - and told it all in those two words! Thanks for the read...and Nicely done.
What a lovely story! I thoroughly enjoyed it. Well done, well done!