The Official Writing Challenge
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Beautiful story! Loved the ending. Great love "shown" here and not "told".
03/01/08
This is lovely - I could picture the scene very vividly. Nicely done.
03/01/08
Great title, and a wonderful story.

The first part was great with the "showing"--the second part had lovely action, but was a bit "telling."

The bits with the "universal language" were awesome, and I could very easily envision the clinic and the people in it. Nice job!
This was well written. I was fully engaged throughout the story and loved the ending.
03/02/08
Vivid descriptions. Keep writing.
03/02/08
Great job, great story and you told it wonderfully. Only one thing, people never go to be angels in heaven. Other than that it was on topic and a great read.
03/02/08
Such a beautiful, touching story with a loving "action-filled" type of story with love of neighbor. Your Title was Right On - and told it all in those two words! Thanks for the read...and Nicely done.
What a lovely story! I thoroughly enjoyed it. Well done, well done!