The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a very encouraging story. I fail to see the topic, but that might just be me. It still stands as a very good piece.
02/29/08
Ben could have just mailed Cassie a letter -- but he felt is was so important, he acted on his love for Cassie to tell her in person the Good News! Excellently written...I wonder how the next chapter will read? :)
03/01/08
A very inspiring story - love the hope.

Some of your paragraphs seemed quite long - I would suggest breaking the bigger ones into smaller chunks to help with readability.

Very nicely written. I also wonder what the next chapter holds.
03/01/08
Awwww, how sweet!

I wonder if there's some way to get around the "predictablity" factor in this one? I knew quite early how it would end...perhaps keep the ending, but add one more twist?

This is lovely and full of hope and grace...very nice.
03/02/08
I agree on 2 points, not exactly on topic and a predictable end. Overall good writing with a typo here and there, keep writing.
The dialogue is a bit cliche, but besides that, quite a sweet little story.