The Official Writing Challenge
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heartbreaking story, and so true, it is so sad when guys say one thing and do another. Great work
Very good example here. Often, this is all too true.
Wow... Saying I love you needs to be followed up with showing that I love you. Excellent writing--perfectly on topic.
Very powerful - and extremely effective use of repetition. I could feel her pain so clearly. Excellent.
Oh, the rich irony in the title of this! Excellent!

I'd suggest that someone with your superb writing skills could move it up just a notch my avoiding cliches. I caught a few, including "happiest day of her life" and "stomach was in knots". An excellent writer will find fresh new ways to express those concepts.

And you're an excellent writer--I felt every emotion right along with Dana.
Wonderful writing in this piece. I agree with Jan's advice. Keep writing.
Wow. The ending worked for a short story, but in a longer piece, I would wonder what happened to the characters afterwards.