The Official Writing Challenge
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02/28/08
Ouch! After the first instance, this story followed a fairly predicatble pattern, but you provided a super twist and a great kicker at the end. Very well written.
I liked this example of the topic. How often this is probably true.
02/29/08
LOVE the end. Really hit me. It was a bit predictable in the middle, but the detail was quite good.
02/29/08
Out of the mouths of babes... Excellent story on the topic!
03/01/08
Well-written with a good ending.
03/01/08
Good job.
I agree with the others who said this was somewhat predictable, but I think that "works" here. That was an incredible last line, too, that wrapped it all up so neatly.
Ouch, oh the lack if diplomacy of the little ones. I feel that we may have placer here, keep writing.
03/03/08
Out of the mouths of babes! Double ouch. Great work.
The ending really pierced me. I began to think about myself, and how so many times in the past, I have driven past people in need, assuming that someone else will take care of them. Thank you so much for your story filled with truth and conviction. It was a joy to read. :)
03/05/08
Your heart really shines through this piece. My kids are ALWAYS the ones who point out the truth about my flaws and weaknesses, and I think God is so good to give us that perspective. You could've picked a hundred different ways to approach this message, but I love that you used the questions of a precious-hearted little child. :)
03/05/08
The end is a great punch. Well done!
03/05/08
Hard questions indeed! I didn't see the last question coming, but boy did it fit in well with this piece. I love Olivia, what a darling little girl! You did great with this piece! ^_^
Wow! Loved that last sentence, what a killer. This is a great reminder for me, being the mother of a five year old. I am the example she watches day in and day out. It's a constant question- does she see Jesus in me? Well done, newbie (on the boards, that is). Looking forward to seeing more of your work.
03/06/08
****Congratulations! This was a well-deserved win!****
03/06/08
Congratulations on your EC. The dialogue was excellent, and the scenario probably way too familiar in Christian families.
03/06/08
Congratulations Mandy...this was excellent. I loved the last line. Ouch!
03/07/08
I love this. Congratulations on your EC win!