The Official Writing Challenge
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Powerful writing, and a very good job of "showing, not telling."
Wow! Double Wow! I never realized in the beginning I was reading about a funeral. In fact, I had to return to the first paragraph to get the beginning scenario again after I finished reading the last line of this entry. A super, powerful, well written, touching story that makes it's Point not only the hard way, but a Smashing, Brilliant, Final Curtain Coming Down type of way...that deserves a Standing Ovation for excellence! I repeat. Wow!

Very powerful descriptions. I love that you didn't tie this up with a nice little bow. Very realistic.
Excellent story. I could see this being part of a larger story. Keep writing.
A few grammar problems and interesting take on topic. A matter of taste whether piece needs more fleshing out or not. I would have preferred more but that's just me. Good writing though.