The Official Writing Challenge
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02/22/08
Yes, I think many families have a relative like that...how sad.

A few word errors: "suppose" for "supposed", and "sheik" for "shriek". And be careful of slipping into 2nd person as you did in the 3rd paragraph: you have a few "you"s that should have been "I"s.

I like the juxtaposition of the happy memories with the darkness of your uncle's contempt. Very effective.
02/23/08
The contrast between the pleasant and the bad is very good. Good descriptions especially.
02/23/08
The topic is the only thing I find missing...otherwise it is a beautiful "down Memory Lane type story". Perhaps it's just me, as I seem to be the only one that doesn't see it. Guess I'm dense. (*.*)! But I enjoyed the lovely story, and the point is well taken.
02/27/08
I loved the memories of the grandparents farm, brought back memories of my own. I did not however see this week's topic. Keep writing.