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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Don't Cut off Your Nose to Spite Your Face" (without using the actual phrase or litera (02/14/08)

TITLE: GLEANING
By Emily Blakely
02/18/08


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Trickling drops of sweat follow furrows on the man’s face, dropping to dampen his chest. Arms glisten from the early spring sun as he gathers greens and roots to provide a meal for his family, soon to increase in number.

Anguished, thinking of the pain his wife would bear, The time draws near. Will it be a boy or girl child?

Having spent the cold months in a cave shelter, finding food in an expanding search had become increasingly difficult.

Welcoming the last mountain descent, muscles aching, Soon, we will leave the cave, when the newborn is strong enough. Then I will make a shelter for us in a place where the soil is better and will grow our food.

A foot feels solid ground and he turns, brushing a tuft of grass.

“Sssssss,” a snake slithers away. Cringing, memories flash before him.

The creature is everywhere I go. I lift a rock to make a clearing, it is there. I go to a stream to draw water, it is there. I am sickened at the sight of it, and my own words come back to me: ’The woman you gave me...’ “Why did I ever think saying that would excuse me?”

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...cursed is the ground...in sorrow shalt thou eat of it...thorns and thistles shall it bring forth...eat of the herb of the field...in the sweat of thy face shalt thou eat bread...for dust thou art and unto dust shalt thou return.
Gen. 3:17-19 (KJV)


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Jan Ackerson 02/22/08
I like it! Short, lyrical, biting.
Seema Bagai 02/22/08
Some poetic images in this piece. There were also some awkward phrases. Reading the piece out loud before submitting will help. Keep wrting.
Holly Westefeld02/22/08
I like how you concealed Adam's identity until the end.
The topic tie-in, however, keeps eluding me, though I feel like I should be getting it. Just a little too subtle for me, I guess. :-)
Joanne Sher 02/23/08
Very clever. I love how succinct it is, but would also LOVE to see it expanded. This is very well-written.