The Official Writing Challenge
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02/22/08
I can definitely see this performed, either by people or puppets. Well done.
02/22/08
Nicely-made point - and I like the format.

Some of the dialog seemed a bit stilted, but it could just be me. Try reading it out loud and see if it feels natural to you.

An enjoyable read.
Youth group? VBS? Children's church? Don't forget to share this with your church. I loved your analogy.
02/23/08
Really nicely done. I could see using this with puppets at our church's Wednesday night children's time. Keep up the good work.
02/25/08
Creative take on topic. I noticed a "their" that should be "there" - but otherwise, nicely done...and has a good moral to the story.