The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/08
This was quite clever and got a chuckle out of me several times...

I can't find a strong tie-in to the topic without a stretch.

The creativity that the Lord has given you is AMAZING, and I look forward to seeing more of it. :)
Excellent! Bravo.
02/14/08
To say your poem is clever is an understatement. I love it! What a cute piece :D
02/15/08
I enjoyed the poem, but the story leading up to the poem made me feel sorry for MC. It was probably suppose to be humourous but it fell flat to me.
I sympathized with your situation. Computers can be so frustrating! What I really loved was your poem, though. You have great talent here and I hope you continue to pursue it.
This was fun. I actually spotted the topic twice, once when "himself" was upset and thoughtless about his malfunctioning mouse, and then when her mouse was appropriated.
I liked the line about angry cat noises.
02/19/08
'DOS' this mean I need a mouse to write my comment? I love the song! There is no use crying over a spilt--in this case--stolen mouse! I can almost imagine the mouse dancing... returning to its rightful owner!
02/27/08
Fiona, this is delightful! I can't think how I missed it a few weeks ago. I plan to feature it for the Front Page Showcase for the week of March 24. Look for it on the FaithWriters Home page, and keep writing!
03/24/08
No! You can't live with Himself...I live with Himself!
I absolutely loved this; the poem/song ditty made me laugh out loud. I am so glad that I noticed it on the front page this evening...it was wonderfully creative and funny. Thanks!
Oh Fiona, I can see why this was showcased! So funny! I loved the poem/song and the more I read, the more I laughed. I hope you bought a second mouse for just such a time as this in the future. Naughty 'Himself', I think you might need to set a mousetrap.
03/28/08
Fiona, this was absolutely great! Congratulations on your showcase! I love the voice of your MC, and you're right - who can understand the computer jargon of those stupid manuals! (Yes, I believe that our guardian angels have a bit of a laugh at us now and then! :D)
Very good and funny. Having struggled years ago with "dos" myself i really can offer you my sympathy! Nice piece for the showcase.
03/29/08
What fun to read! I hope you were finally given your mouse back. Who would have thought there'd be so much commotion over a "dead mouse". Congrats on being the FW Frontpage Showcase author!