The Official Writing Challenge
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02/07/08
Good job with the realistic dialogue.

I'd have liked to see this go on a bit longer, so that you could do some character development. It ended rather abruptly, and you had lots of words left over.

Good message here!
02/09/08
Great dialog! Brushing it up with some careful proofreading will make this shine. Put your extra words to use and illustrate the topic more. The dialog is very realistic and showed us a lot about the MC without telling us about him. I could picture him as he spoke. :-)
02/11/08
Nice story, I love the mystery and intrigue of not knowing till the story is almost done, exactly who Kevin is hanging out with. Great job
02/13/08
Good job you're on your way, do some fill work at the end and this is a winner.