The Official Writing Challenge
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02/08/08
Very sad!

You wrote about bad company, but not really about the meat of the proverb, which is being judged by your companions. Watch out for run-on sentences!

I'd love to see this little story expanded, and to get to know these characters a little better. Keep writing!
02/08/08
Good potential! Showing us the events would have more impact. Danny sounds like a great character --it would be neat to know more about him.