The Official Writing Challenge
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02/08/08
You're right: We're to be lights in a dark place. This may be 'off topic' for demonstrating this particular proverb, but it's an excellent testimony of being that Light. Ride on! :-) (couldn't resist. LoL)
02/09/08
Very good--I really enjoyed reading this, and your relaxed writing style.

There are some unnecessary commas that interrupt the flow of this piece occasionally. Not to worry, commas are tricky. It might help if you read it aloud with an exaggerated pause at each comma--you'll see which ones are superfluous.

I love that you hang out with the "Grow Old Disgracefully" crowd!
Loved it.
Keep riding especially as you have a very special companion with you always.
Love Norms