The Official Writing Challenge
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02/08/08
Wow! Gripping. I was a little lost at times, but not enough to stop me from reading and finding out what happened. That's one of the challenges with the word count. Good job.
02/09/08
Lots of great atmosphere and suspense in this story.

I was confused a bit by the narrator; it's not until nearly the end that she's revealed as female, so that was a bit disorienting. And not all of the action/motivations were clear...

Nevertheless, very strong writing and a story that gripped me to the end.
This held me to the end, also. You were dealing with word limits here and I think if you could expand it beyond the 750 word limit imposed by the challenge most of the confusion would disappear. Good job!