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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of ďAll that Glitters is Not GoldĒ (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/24/08)

TITLE: "When You are Weak, Then I am Strong!"
By Helen Murray
01/30/08


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Conundrum, conundrum.
Discover, disclose a conundrum
When I am strong I puff up my chest,
A self-fancying pigeon impressing the rest,
A proud and haughty and dignified chap,
I have all the answers right here on tap
(Or maybe my laptop, if Iím ďone of thoseĒ),
An educated, superior man, I suppose!
My mind is resourceful, the internetís handy.
Iím right up to date and Iím mentally randy.
I work every day and I work through the night.
Yes, Iím building an empire and I know Iíll be right.

And then comes the crunch, and I fall to the ground,
The latest investment has proven unsound.
My dear son is dying, theyíve taken my house,
My wife had a breakdown, sheís no more my spouse!
My daughter is married and lives interstate
With her man and three children Ė the usual fate.
And Iím lonely.
No friends!
No-one cares about me!
And what am I going to do about tea?
I can go to the fish-shop, and they are quite kind
But to my situation theyíre really quite blind
But there is no-one else now. Itís too much for me.
Maybe Iíll just go and walk out, out, out - to sea.

It goes on forever, no future in sight.
I tried a new girlfriend but she saw my plight.
Nothing in it for her, and sheís off out of sight
With a teacher, of all things. Well, that serves her right!
But I am not angry, oh no, thatís not me.
Itís my wife was the problem. Now if only she
Had been more sympathetic and done all I said,
Then Iíd not be so hard on her, quite like I did.
And the banks will not lend me Ė Iíve done all the rounds
In my world there simply are no pleasant sounds.
Itís the sea, yes the ocean. Iíll go on my way.
Iíll be out of this misery in just one more day.
O God, if there is one, are you still around?
Because if you are, I am soon seaward bound.



H E L P !



And He answered and said with this wonderful dream,
You must help Me with My work. Weíll be a great team.Ē
ďIím so sorryĒ, I told Him. ďIíve been a great fool,
ďForgiven,Ē my Lord said. ďA new dayís in store.Ē
So I bowed before Him who knows much more than I.
Why I didnít before I shall never know why!
Thereís a manual for living. Iíd read it before,
But this time it speaks to me Ė rules I adore!
So Iíve started training with Almighty God,
And I know where Iím going Ė Iím walking His road


Whatever it takes!


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James Dixon02/02/08
I'm not a great reader of poetry, but I am so glad that someone has broken away from the usual 4 line rhymes that I have read so often in the writing challenge.
Sara Harricharan 02/05/08
This is very interesting! My favorite line was the one with the laptop. Lol. I could relate there. Nice format, it is refreshing and new. ^_^
Joanney Uthe02/06/08
Wonderful description of a lonely life and the consequences of our choices. You do a great job getting into the MC's head.

My favorite line was the one where the poeple at the shop were friendly but blind to the MC's plight. This line describes the topic better than anything else I've read this week.
Emily Blakely02/06/08
Enjoyed the poetic form and it kept me reading all the way through. Great ending!
Justus Ondieki05/04/11
Helen, this was a wonderful piece of poetry, you have done it so excellently until I thought, why did it end. Keep up writing my dear friend for His glory.
Wishing you every joy.
Justus