The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/08
I'm not a great reader of poetry, but I am so glad that someone has broken away from the usual 4 line rhymes that I have read so often in the writing challenge.
02/05/08
This is very interesting! My favorite line was the one with the laptop. Lol. I could relate there. Nice format, it is refreshing and new. ^_^
02/06/08
Wonderful description of a lonely life and the consequences of our choices. You do a great job getting into the MC's head.

My favorite line was the one where the poeple at the shop were friendly but blind to the MC's plight. This line describes the topic better than anything else I've read this week.
02/06/08
Enjoyed the poetic form and it kept me reading all the way through. Great ending!
Helen, this was a wonderful piece of poetry, you have done it so excellently until I thought, why did it end. Keep up writing my dear friend for His glory.
Wishing you every joy.
Justus