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I like this hope-filled story. Thank God for friends who will help break destructive cycles, one step at a time.

Red Ink: I would use the noun "discouragement" at the beginning to properly agree with the nouns "hopelessness" and "depression", and the pronoun "they".
01/24/08
I've rarely read an entry written in 2nd person, and it's quite effective here. Nice job.
01/27/08
A nice topic for forgiveness but weak on this weeks topic. Still very well written.
01/28/08
I think this is very good, and would have an audience that would really benefit from the wisdom here.

Red ink: I agree with a previous comment. I think the word "discouragement" works better.

In my opinion, this is very on-topic. Great example of the proverb. Nice job.
01/28/08
Tearful. Hopeful. Blessed.

You hit the mark on this entry imho. I see the topic clearly. Agree that "discouragement" would be better and was going to suggest it before I read the other comments. Other than that, I absolutely love this article, including the POV. The last sentence absolutely ROCKS!
01/28/08
I want to give you big kudos for trying something different and being willing to learn from it. Red ink: Just a personal opinion: I would have turned this into a short story and written it in first person to get more feeling and description out of it.
01/30/08
Nice change of pace. Good read.
01/30/08
This is great! I loved how you wove your title in with the actual steps and mentioned the progress. Depression is something that needs someone to help with. This was good. Nice work! ^_^
01/31/08
The second person POV is very effective in this piece. I also think you have hit the mark on the topic and think this is quite different and a nice change of pace from other entries.