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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “Don’t Try to Walk before You Can Crawl” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/17/08)

TITLE: Steps Toward Healing
By Beckie Stewart
01/23/08


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Discouraged. Hopelessness. Depression. They seem to have taken a permanent residence in your heart. What do you do? How do you overcome it? It is threatening to destroy you.

Nothing ever seems to change. Your life is a mess, and you blame yourself. After all, you were the one that snapped at your friend when she suggested your boyfriend choice was unhealthy for you.

“Just give up.”
“You are worthless.”
“You never do anything right.”

No one is saying it, but nevertheless, you hear it loud and clear. You are pretty sure they think it.

In total despair, you cry out to the Lord. Answers. Direction. Help. You wait and wait for something. In a voice gently spoken within you the solution seems too obvious.

Scared, you pick up the phone. Your friend agrees and off you run to meet her at your favorite Starbucks. She graciously forgives you for your sin as you humbly take responsibility for it.

She helps you locate a Christian counselor and sits with you as you make the call for the appointment. She goes with you to end your relationship with your abusive boyfriend. She picks you up each week for not only your counseling sessions, but for church as well.

In time you realize you must seek forgiveness from your family and she drives you there, but waits in the car. Each week after that, she drops you off at your parent’s home and returns later to bring you back to your apartment.

Finally one Sunday morning you call her up and tell her, “I will meet you at the service. I am going to pick up my family for church today.”


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Holly Westefeld01/24/08
I like this hope-filled story. Thank God for friends who will help break destructive cycles, one step at a time.

Red Ink: I would use the noun "discouragement" at the beginning to properly agree with the nouns "hopelessness" and "depression", and the pronoun "they".
Jan Ackerson 01/24/08
I've rarely read an entry written in 2nd person, and it's quite effective here. Nice job.
c clemons01/27/08
A nice topic for forgiveness but weak on this weeks topic. Still very well written.
Sheri Gordon01/28/08
I think this is very good, and would have an audience that would really benefit from the wisdom here.

Red ink: I agree with a previous comment. I think the word "discouragement" works better.

In my opinion, this is very on-topic. Great example of the proverb. Nice job.
Catrina Bradley 01/28/08
Tearful. Hopeful. Blessed.

You hit the mark on this entry imho. I see the topic clearly. Agree that "discouragement" would be better and was going to suggest it before I read the other comments. Other than that, I absolutely love this article, including the POV. The last sentence absolutely ROCKS!
Sally Hanan01/28/08
I want to give you big kudos for trying something different and being willing to learn from it. Red ink: Just a personal opinion: I would have turned this into a short story and written it in first person to get more feeling and description out of it.
Temple Miller01/30/08
Nice change of pace. Good read.
Sara Harricharan 01/30/08
This is great! I loved how you wove your title in with the actual steps and mentioned the progress. Depression is something that needs someone to help with. This was good. Nice work! ^_^
Dee Yoder 01/31/08
The second person POV is very effective in this piece. I also think you have hit the mark on the topic and think this is quite different and a nice change of pace from other entries.