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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “Don’t Try to Walk before You Can Crawl” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/17/08)

TITLE: A BIG FINISH STARTS SMALL
By Rebecca O'Connor
01/17/08


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David was a ruddy lad
Who, for so small, was Godly clad
His faith was tiny as the sand
Just a crawler in the land

He practiced daily on his aim
Chucking rocks became quite plain
But better did his faith demand
Though just a crawler in the land

As the shepherd, faced the foe
But seldom ever used a bow
He used the simple not the grand
Since just a crawler in the land

But practice did he faithfully
And saw what God could make him be
He would be all God had planned
Now he walked upon the land

Fought the lion and the bear
Walked right up to lion’s lair
Faced each giant without balk
Faith grew tall and he did walk

The day came when Goliath stood
“I will beat him as I should
Who's this ungodly Philistine?”
Said he, the short and very lean

“How dare he mock God in this way!
I will bring him down today
No more listening to his talk
No more crawling…I will walk!”

And so he walked and did not crawl
He showed the army one and all
What one could do within God’s hand
To stand and walk like his Lord planned

Here’s the moral to be seen
If your mind is rather keen
Before egg turns to butterfly
Larvae on their bellies lie


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Jan Ackerson 01/24/08
Great Bible story for this proverb, and a clever poem.

I'm a little bit worried about your use of "crawl" and "walk"--maybe using the proverb too much? But I really liked the progression through the poem, and the last 4 lines are simply outstanding.
Beckie Stewart01/24/08
Being that I cannot produce a lick of poetry, I love reading those who can and it amazes me. I loved your story and I love poetry that has rhyme as well as rhythm. Loved your poem. For some reason found the first couple lines a bit of stumbling and not sure reason, but just loved it once I got into rhythm.
Clive McLaren01/25/08
A very good interpretative poem on David and Goliath, well done!
Ideal for this week's subject.
Karen Wilber 01/26/08
The title grabbed my attention (not because of the all caps, but because of the wording). The last 4 lines paint a wonderful image. Clever.
c clemons01/27/08
Some good parts, or points, needs tweaking in a lot of areas but the message is there.
Paul Potenza01/28/08
I LOVED it. "How dare they mock God in this way...I will bring him down this day."
Great poetry. Great use of the subject. Keep writing. I do poetry too (just not as good as yours.)

Pauly
LauraLee Shaw01/31/08
Congratulations on your EC !!!! :) A big finish after all!!!!
Beth LaBuff 01/31/08
Wonderful poem with a super cute ending moral. Congrats on your EC!
Gerald Shuler 02/08/08
Welcome to Advanced. Your talent shows in this entry. I look forward to being bested by you in Level 3.