The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice retelling of a familiar story. Great reminder for all of us who love the Lord.
WOW. Absolutely excellent. I was totally engaged, and even though I knew the story, I was on the edge of my seat. Perfect ending too. I hope this does well.
I too enjoyed reading the story so familiar. You had me the entire time and like how you left the reader sort of waiting and saying "give me more".
You really set this up well describing David's first look at Bathsheba. Nice positioning of Uriah being in battle to the battle David loses in his mind.
Good writing - nice retelling of a familiar story. I liked the way you ended your piece - David, the mighty warrior for God, losing the most important battle of his life when he hardened his heart to God's voice.
We learn so much from David's examples, both positive and negative.
You've got some great phrases and descriptions here that really make this familiar story seem fresh and new.
An awesome story on this topic! It reads like a movie...