The Official Writing Challenge
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Heart rending! I had trouble with the meter -- poetry is not my strong suit. Writing a good story in verse form is a very difficult skill (I certainly don't have it.) This really pull out at the emotions - good job!
This certainly moved me - what a story. A bit of work on the meter would help this flow better. I ached for this man.
I don't have a talent for telling a story through poetry, but I think you do if you keep working at it. Your meter is off - the words don't flow when read aloud. The story is great, but work on the rythym. Read your poems aloud and see how they flow to the ear. Keep writing and perfecting a nice talent!