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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of “A Bird in the Hand is Worth Two in the Bush” (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/10/08)

TITLE: Shame on him
By Kenneth Heath
01/16/08


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SHAME ON HIM.

What a fool he had been, he had confused lust for love, and now it was too late. He had just received a phone call from his former brother in-law to inform him that his ex-wife, a woman with whom he had spent nearly thirty years, had been killed in a car crash. He had blood on his hands, as it was his fault that after the divorce she had been forced to go back to work as a medical rep to survive.

The divorce had been an extremely nasty affair. He had been able to afford a good divorce lawyer and with a signed prenuptial in his greedy hands, the mother of his two children and his wife of nearly thirty years had been left to fend for herself with virtually nothing to show for all those years of marriage. Their two children tried to assist, but with their limited incomes it was insufficient and so her brother had taken her in, and she had managed to get a travelling sales job that served to keep her head above water, but only just.

She was a good wife and mother; one could say a Proverbs 31 wife in all that she did. The divorce was his fault entirely. He had confused love with lust and had run off with a woman 15 years his junior. Yes she was a looker and yes their times together were amazing, but how could he have been so blind?

After they had been caught out, his wife tried to save the marriage but to no avail. They went to marriage counselling, but he could not pay attention, as his mind was on his lover and the evenings they had planned together. His wife forgave him and begged him to end the relationship and come back home, but her words fell on deaf ears.

He knew the scriptures off by heart, he had committed a grievous sin before almighty God and his family, but somehow he did not care. He was in love with a beautiful woman who offered him everything his heart desired, he was in love, totally smitten by her, so he threw caution to the wind, ignored his pastor and his friends well intended advices and terminated his marriage.

He’d walked away with the lion’s share of their assets and lover girl was ecstatic as she reviewed her new kingdom with little “oohs” and “aahs”. They got married and being totally smitten with his kitten, he forgot to have a pre-nup drawn up. Silly boy, six months later they were divorced, and she took him to the cleaners. The pool guy moved in with her, and he moved into a very small bed-sitter, as she got the home and contents, half his pension and a large portion of his investments. Now paying two alimonies and her lawyers, he had very little to survive on.

The divorce went through yesterday, the day his first wife died, and he is so miserable and lonely. He ruined her life and his relationship with his children. He is not welcome at his church and has no friends to speak of. He is well aware that he will reap what he has sown. His future looks exceedingly bleak and he will still have to face our Lord in the future and explain just how he confused lust with love. Shame on him.


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Joanne Sher 01/18/08
The title says it all. What a tragic situation you write about. We certainly do reap what we sow.
You might want to do a bit more description in your piece, to bring the characters more alive.
A cautionary tale, perfectly showing the topic. Keep writing.
Beckie Stewart01/20/08
This is very sad and unfortunately only too real in life. I agree that this needed more showing, but I still could see where the MC had been and the regrets he was now facing. Keep writing.
Sally Hanan01/21/08
You give us a good account of what happened, now bring us into the character's mind and show us what he sees; help us to feel what he feels. Start the story off with the MC looking back at his wasted life and show through his body's actions how he feels about himself and his choices. Maybe give us a little hope at the end instead of helping us to judge him. If you don't know how to do that, look at the masters' entries for this week and you should find some good material to work with. Based on this story, I believe that you are more than capable of carrying it off.
Norma-Anne Hough 01/24/08
Wow! I liked this one. Bit scary what lust can do!!! Love Norms