The Official Writing Challenge
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01/10/08
Very engaging and surprise ending. Thanks for writing.
01/11/08
Yep, good surprise ending--but how is she telling this story now, if she's dead?

I couldn't quite figure out the narrator's age--she was a teacher, but she was also a student, and living with her mom...a little clarification would have helped there.

This is a cautionary tale that will appeal to teens. Good job.
01/12/08
I'm a man and I cried!

This was a true story whether you know it or not.

I want to quote the thirteen your old's definition of “To come to Christ will cost you nothing, to obey Christ will cost you something and to follow Christ will cost you everything” to my church.

I want to read the article to the church's teen group.

I want to seriouly consider my personal evangelistic efforts and the depth of my own faith.

"The essence of time" you took to write this has impacted me and I think it will impact the people I can influence.

Wow!
01/18/08
Congratulations, Jennifer, on placing 6th in your level with this entry. Great work!