The Official Writing Challenge
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Ooh, how my heart aches for this mother. Thanks for the courage to tell this tale. Send this off, many people need to hear this message.
01/10/08
Powerful story. Good choice in seperating the periods of time with the one sentence paragraphs. You made the story easy to follow and the sections flowed well. Nice work!
01/11/08
Oh, excellent, just excellent!
Great format - great story - excellent writing - and a powerful message - you pretty much have the whole package here.
How I wish I could write this on the heart of every young mother in the world, starting with my own daughter! What a great story.
01/18/08
Congratulations, Jim, on placing first in your level. By the way, your entry also was 39th overall. Great job!
This article has a powerful impact. The short sentences between paragraphs helped maintain the emotion and move the piece along. I wonder how it would affect people who have tried to raise their children the "right way" but still have them turn out badly?