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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of ďA Stitch in Time Saves NineĒ (without using the actual phrase or literal example). (01/03/08)

TITLE: Evil's End Zone
By Nathan Perkins
01/03/08


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Satan dropped back to forward his most well intended and devious pass. He was going deep. The very people who were supposed to be supporting the causes of God would be confused on the play and end up throwing picks against their own team. Team Jesus would surly go down in defeat as Satan lobbed his winning deep bomb.

The camera angles swirled as the briefest of moments passed. In the air the ball spun giving a perfect spiral. It was an instant that hung in the air like a still frame. It was the instant that would determine human destiny for all eternity. The doors of hell were opened wide. Evilís end zone would catch all that is good off guard plummeting saints to the depths.

Team Jesus was no where to be seen. The Pharisees and the Sadducees blocked their own players from getting down the field. The end zone was full of Evil.

Would the ball be caught? Would evil win? Every eye of every true fan of good closed in grief. No one even saw what really happened.

Every minion of Evilís sideline began to celebrate. The ball was caught. It was a winÖ

But wait. Itís hard to tell what happened. The pile of players clambered to their feet to see who came up with the ball. The pile was filled with Evil. There were so many potential receivers for Satanís team. Deception stood. There was no ball in his hand. Betrayal hung his head ashamed. There was no ball in his hand. Denial turned to reveal his hands were empty.

Satan was not concerned. His pass was intended for Death. Death never failed. When Death appeared, all of Evil rose with him to cheer. The crowd had realized that the game was decided. Satan and Death had struck with a final blow. The sting to good was immediate. It was so immediate that no one noticed that the referee was not showing that a touchdown was achieved.

Instead he was signaling that the play was over. Three days later when the crowd was finally silent. The referee was able to say the words that would turn everything around;
ďThe ball was intercepted.Ē

An interception is when a ball is recovered by the defense. It turns the tables in a football game, in an instant. One team may be making great progress towards their goal when they accidently throw a bad pass. The other team then ends up with the ball and the opportunity to score. The tables are turned.

Fans from one team turn dumb and the fans from the other team erupt with enthusiasm. In a game where the score is close and time has almost run out, this kind of turnover can be the determining factor in who wins and who looses.

In only a brief seemingly insignificant moment everything changes.

I know of a critical moment like this. It was a time when it seemed like all was lost for the known world. Evil was rampant and time was running out. All hope was seemingly lost. But all was not lost. There was a critical play in the hands of the Omnipotent One.

Despite his limitless power, this would not be a power play. It would be a play of innocence and purity. It would be a play of humility and grace. It would be an interception.

Bewilderment filled the stadium. The pass that was intended for Evil was intercepted by Good.


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Catherine Pollock01/10/08
As far as the concept for this piece, all I can say is... Wow. I did notice a few punctuation and spelling errors, but the message came through loud and clear.
Lesley-Anne Evans01/10/08
VERY creative... and very engaging. I think the ending could have done without the paragraph that starts with, "I know of a critical moment like this..." I'd rather just make the connection myself between your allegory and reality. But other than that, this is really wonderful. Good writing... definitely a touchdown for you!

LA. Evans
Debbie Wistrom01/10/08
Great title. This piece shows incredible creativity. Would have preferred if you left it as the idea of the game without telling us. Loved the ending. Keep writing!
Temple Miller01/10/08
I could picture, through your words, the progression of the events. Good details. I could see this piece as a Carmen video.
Jan Ackerson 01/11/08
Great extended metaphor.

What would you think of ending with "the ball was interecepted."? That's where the oomph is...

I have to stretch quite a bit to get this to fit the topic for the week, but I really love it...extremely creative.
Paul Potenza01/11/08
What a "Stich In Time" THAT was. I was absolutely inspired. An easy read and so fitting for this time of year. I wish that God had run it back and scored an additional touchdown but in retrospect He was graceful and kind and permanent.

I don't know you but I wish you peace my friend. You gave me a ton to think about.

Pauly
c clemons01/12/08
Nice allegory for a youth group perhaps, those who are just are starting on their path. The ending could have pointed out that the game was already fixed. We "won" from the beginning, only one who didn't know was satan.
Tim Pickl01/17/08
Awesome allegory! The Eternal Super Bowl
Tim Pickl01/17/08
Awesome allegory! The Eternal Super Bowl