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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: The Church (12/06/07)

TITLE: The Night Satan Saved Me
By Debbie Wistrom
12/12/07


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The mirror betrayed everything about last night, except for the stench of smoke that saturated my clothes and the strange peace that had settled into my heart. Tears streaked my soot covered face, smudged by the dull grey from smoke. My disheveled appearance masked the calmness that came from action.

Friday night is the quietest night in my neighborhood. It had become my favorite night of the week because the church next door was dark and empty. No car doors slamming, no noise from happy families and friends calling out to each other. I could sit on my porch and enjoy my solitude.

This is where I was when I saw smoke pouring from the stain-glassed windows. After calling 911, I waited. I didn’t want to be in the way, but something was telling me to go help. As I waited for the sirens, instead of jumping with joy with the eminent demise of the structure that had caused me so much grief over the past year, I started remembering the events that led to today.

After months of searching for the right house, my realtor shyly suggested viewing this property. I didn’t understand her hesitancy and fell in love instantly. A wrap-around porch was high on my wish list and here it was. Just one house to the north and a cute little white church would be my neighbor to the south. No noisy neighbors like those I had left behind with this move, or so I thought, as I admired the sharp white steeple and the quaint architecture. The town was busy but this could be my oasis.

After the confusion from the move subsided, I started to settle into my new neighborhood. Then the commotion began. The constant comings and goings of this gregarious congregation was never-ending. My quiet Sunday mornings of reading the newspaper from my comfortable porch were soon shattered by the droves of families, many whom would wave as they pulled into parking spots. It was my peaceful street filling up with cars as they paraded by the live nativity scene for three whole weeks before Christmas. Easter morning was a crush of activity between the sunrise service and the egg hunt later in the day. My ears rang from all the slamming of car doors. Not just holidays, but vacation bible school and choir practice. One summer weekend every church member was there, pounding nails or washing windows or mowing grass.

The first fire truck startled me from my musings. The man I recognized as the pastor was standing in the yard, alone, looking lost. I moved. Not understanding why, I went to him and asked what I could do to help. He gave me a blank look and stared back at the church. The smoke had turned to flames and the redness reflected on his face taut with emotion. He said most of the members were away on a retreat, and would I go in with him to help salvage some priceless items.

As the fire chief led us in, the pastor starting calling out “Satan, Satan, where are you?” It wasn’t blame I heard in his voice, it was concern. A faint meow was his reply and I could see a black cat under a pile of debris that had already fallen. “Could you take Satan home and see that he is safe?” I rattled my head in disbelief. To hear this request from a man of God was too much. Another meow and I understood. Scooping up the cat, I ran home. He was shaking as I pulled out old towels and made a bed for him in the bathtub. I filled a bowl of water and placed it on the drain, closed the bathroom door and ran back to the church.

More men had arrived and had started a fire line to help retrieve some church relics. That line of people saved many items, including a historic Bible, and antique collection plates. Little did anyone know at the time, a neighbor too, was saved. Amid the smoke and confusion, firefighters and church members, I discovered that a church is more than a building; it is where all kinds of people come together under all kinds of circumstances. I don’t know when the tears flowed. I don’t know if they were for the cat, the church, or for me, but they did and I have the tracks tonight to prove it.


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Joanne Sher 12/16/07
This is absolutely breathtaking and captivating. Loved your descriptions and voice. I have a hard time believing a pastor would name a cat "Satan," but that's probably just me. I'm amazed you don't have more reads with a title like that. I can't imagine you'll be in intermediate for long if you keep writing like this.
Jan Ross12/16/07
You've got a great story line here and a great way of showing the church as the people and not the building. I kinda struggle, too, with the name of the cat but understand why you did it. It certainly would draw attention to the title! There were a few grammar issues, but other than that, your writing is very good. Good job! Christmas blessings! :)
Marilyn Schnepp 12/16/07
I'm trying to type while being blinded by a flood of tears. Such a beautiful and wondrous story, and written so well! The Title lured me in, as it would any True Believer! - but so different than I imagined. Loved it! Absolutely the Cat's Meow! ***** 5 Star Special!
Sheri Gordon12/16/07
This is very good. The writing flows well as is easy to read. I wanted to know more of the story ... like, why was the cat named Satan? Good job with the topic.
Marita Vandertogt12/16/07
Okay, I own two cats and I can almost guess why he named her that... anyway, it makes for a great title. Other than that, good story and really good writing!
Jan Ackerson 12/17/07
Such a charming story!

I think I'd have liked less background material and more of the heart of the story--the fire, Satan (a great name for a cat!), and how exacty that led to the narrator's salvation.

But I loved this--great writing, great voice.
Ann Renae Hair12/18/07
Title got my attention...the story held me! I love the cat being called Satan (1 Peter 5:8). The Pastor was aware of the devil prowling to devour the church! Great writing! Loved it.
JoAnne Potter12/18/07
Lots of good stuff here, story, details, and yes, I liked the cats' name, too. Kept wanting you to have started at a moment of tension, either the fire or the conflict over the nativity scene to grab the reader.
Catrina Bradley 12/18/07
Great job. I love the ending, and how it ties back to the tears in the beginning, explaining that they are from joy. A wonderful salvation story, well told, and you nailed the topic to boot. Super! :) Cat
Peter Stone12/19/07
Great article, with a catchy title. By calling his cat Satan the pastor shows a rare sense of humor. I think 'I moved.' should be 'I was moved.'? I would also like to encourage you to use more dialog and less descriptions, this will add even further depth to your articles. Keep up the good work.
Sara Harricharan 12/19/07
Catchy title. Interesting word play on the cat's name. I liked the ending how everyone came together to save what they could. A nice ending.
Dee Yoder 12/21/07
I had to look up Ann's reference to "get" the name of the cat! Love the title and the story. Enjoyed reading this.
LaNaye Perkins12/21/07
This story was really good. You held my attention throughout. I loved your descriptions, very vivid. Well done.
c clemons12/30/07
I haven't read all the entries in this category but of the ones I have, this one should have won first, or at least placed. You caught everything, the people are the church and you mentioned the "church" building burned, good stuff, good writing. Keep up the good work.
Marilyn Schnepp 04/24/08
If you notice - I've already been here and praised this entry to the high heavens and called it a Real Cat's Meow; However, just wanted to re-read after your sweet comment on my "multi-Uncles" entry. Thanks! (*.*)!


   
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