The Official Writing Challenge
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Loved the last paragraph, keep at it.
12/16/07
Nice story! Sounds like it could have actually happened (at least it sounds like some churches I'm acquainted with). Your first sentence was a bit wordy. Starting out with a good, to-the-point sentence to grab your reader's attention might work better. Little things like that is what makes a good writer a great writer, and you've got what it takes! :) Christmas blessings!
12/17/07
Realistic and sweet, with a great ending. A little bit more back-and-forth dialog between the choir director and the choir would show your readers his frustration more clearly.
12/18/07
Amen indeed! We've all been there.