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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: The Church (12/06/07)

TITLE: the church - the body
By sarah rauch
12/09/07


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The haughty eyes blinking fast
revel in the sight.......at last!
eyeliner, flattering to pronounce
their crystal hue, while lashes flounce

The lips, now shiny, glossy pink
curl shyly up, as if to think
what lucky placement! Up so far!
What a brilliant pair we are

the nostrils, powdered, sniffing slow
the fragrant air, the easy flow
(not always so, sometimes in quick
and desperate need of subtle pick)

the heart beats strongly, stately, proud
it's rhythm measured, thudding loud
importance shown by doctor's attention
the first to be checked, so worth a mention

but...

the humble upper gut today
is feeling rather not okay
something eaten spices cooked
some heating limit overlooked

awkwardly twisting, writhing now
the juices turning rather foul...
the process grows and gathers speed -
one part's problem is the body's need

the eyes catch a paler facial tone
the lips start fading, turning down
the nostrils catch a sniff of smell
signalling that not all is well

The warning sounds, the inner urge
prompts dire action, it must purge
and help this humble hideaway,
in such pressing need today.

The feet do listen and rush to aid
the eyes quick-measure, the hands obey
the throat swallows liquid, ignoring taste
all work to help this tube of waste

The calming down, the burning cools
the throat relaxed, saliva pools
the steady teamwork, focused, swift
all helped the churning acid shift

If the body had not listened,
only preening those who glistened
all would have suffered, paid the toll
for not functioning as a whole

so Eyes, and Hair and humble Gut
Important? Unimportant? But
we need each other, lest we fall
remember the One who holds us all


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Joanne Sher 12/16/07
Very, VERY creative! I really, really liked this. Great images, natural rhyme, wonderful rhythm. That last stanza takes the cake, too. I truly enjoyed this.
Jan Ross12/16/07
Very creative -- a good and easy read with a natural feel to the meter. Great work! Christmas blessings! :)
Jan Ackerson 12/16/07
The 3rd stanza made me laugh out loud--wonderful, wonderful poem. Fantastic entry!
JoAnne Potter12/18/07
Yes! Yes! And the pretties of the body exist simultaneously with the sickies. I saw a couple of levels here, and good strong structure besides. Sell this, won't you?
Joanne Sher 12/21/07
Congratulations, Sara, on placing sixth in your level. Great work!