The Official Writing Challenge
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We've all been there. Loved your account! Praise God He seeks us out while we are yet sinners.
12/16/07
Wonderful and powerful descriptions. I love the pipe organ as it resounds it's own language of praise (so it seems). I imagine someone never having experienced the awe of a church service like this would indeed feel like an alien. Good analogy! Christmas blessings! :)
I like the easy, informal style of this. Many of us can relate to it, too. Well done.
12/16/07
Excellent telling of the church experience from an outsider's POV. It's good for us to see ourselves from a fresh set of eyes.

Try to limit your use of exclamation points--rely on your strong writing and good word choice to convey emotion. And writing as fresh as this deserves a creative, unique title.

This is a very strong entry.
12/16/07
Wow, what a great article. Although I understand why you put your 'thoughts' into parenthesis and made it work, I would love to see them included in the sentences, it would make the story flow smoother. You are such a strong writer, I know you could do it. I really enjoyed your description of someone going to church for the first time. Great job. Keep writing for Him!
Great job, especially on topic, I would have loved some more background on your MC. Keep up the good words!
12/18/07
Boy! Do I remember the day this happened to me! Thanks for the reminder.