The Official Writing Challenge
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Seamless transitions from the present, to the flashback of George returning, and back to the present...very well done. I like the bit where she goes at him with a pillow, too.
I really enjoyed reading this lovely story. I like the little box filled with love from the child-who could resist that? Very nice writing!
Oooh. What a warm and fuzzy feeling comes after reading this! I'm glad it had a sort of happy ending. The last line is priceless!
A lovely story and well put together in style and imagery. The emotions are real and touch my heart.
Loved your use of flashback. This is a warm and fuzzy story and well written.