The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice telling of a child's point of view and the adult getting it.
Sometimes it is the simple approach that touches us most deeply. Nice story.
11/24/07
Poignant - out of the mouth of babes, eh? I like this approach. Wonderful.
11/24/07
I child speaks simply from the heart. That's how we believe. Maybe it was the word limit, but I was wanting more details about the woman in the last couple paragraphs.
11/28/07
Excellent - great ending. Only suggestion is to not use 'lots of' - perhaps a different word or not at all. Keep writing - you doo it well!