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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: New Year (05/09/05)

TITLE: New Indeed
By Robert McFaddin
05/16/05


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The sobs came more freely now. Danny was on his knees with his face buried in his hands. His broad shoulders heaved with emotion. He was oblivious of the part going on downstairs. The overwhelming emptiness he felt in the core of his being had driven him away from the crowd to the small upstairs bedroom.

Sarah and the others never knew Danny had left the party. She also had expressed the same emptiness he had felt, but continued to laugh, drink and dance along with the others in the hope that somehow she could forget the pain. All around the room people were having an apparently good time while Danny continued crying and pouring out his heart.

How long had he put this off? He couldn't remember. All he knew for sure was that he needed to make things right with God. Years of pain, heartache and anger seemed to fall from him as he gave it to God. The relief he began to feel was incredible!

"It's dropping!" Sarah shouted above the din of music and laughter. Everyone turned to look at the image on the huge television.

Danny felt his guilt and shame leaving him as relief and hope took their place.

"Ten... nine... eight..." the party-goers began counting down in unison.

"Lord Jesus..." Danny continued to pray.

"...seven... six... five..." the countdown continued as the enormous glowing ball slowly made its way down the pole.

"...thank you for dying on the cross for my sins." Danny felt true joy for the first time as he continued.

"...four... three... two..." Sarah tried to smile as tears filled her eyes.

"I accept you as my savior and invite you into my heart and life as Lord." Danny said as a smile brightened his face.

"...one!" everyone yelled in unison. Some hugged and shook hands while others kissed.

Danny leapt to his feet. Never had he felt as alive as he did at that moment. He tried to wipe the tears from his eyes, but they kept coming. What were once tears of sorrow were replaced by tears of joy!

Downstairs Sarah sat alone sipping from her half-empty glass. A melancholy look shadowed her face as she pondered what the new year might bring. She felt overwhelmed at the thought of another year of emptiness. Slowly, she lowered her head and wept.

Shouts of Happy New year filled the room as Danny made his way back to the party. He could see Sarah sitting alone across the room.

"Happy New Year Dan-no!" slurred a red-headed man as Danny brushed past him.

"New year? New indeed!" he thought to himself.

The words still echoed in his mind as he reached Sarah. Slowly she looked into his smiling face.

"Have I got good news for you!" He said as he pulled her to her feet.


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Leticia Caroccio05/16/05
I like the way you were able to meld both the countdown to the new year and Danny's confession to a new life. The time lasted for just a moment but you described it very well.
Teresa Oswald05/17/05
I totally agree with Leticia. I could really feel the joyful release and the happy tension as the countdown took place. Very good contrast between Danny's and Sarah's final moments of the old year and first moments of the new.
Sally Hanan05/17/05
Yes, very cleverly crafted.
Phyllis Inniss 05/20/05
I agree with the above comments. The countdown ended Danny's feeling of despair and reached its climax in a feeling joy.
Joyce Simoneaux05/22/05
This was a very good article. I loved the way that Danny's salvation ended the old year and began the new year. A wonderful, new beginning.
Deborah Porter 05/23/05
Robert, congratulations on your 3rd place win in the Level 2 challenge. You actually rated very well over all, and weren't that far off being in the Editors' Choice. So with that in mind, I think it would be a good time to move up to Level 3. You're more than ready for it. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)