The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/07
You had me captivated from title to end. Great storytelling.
You set the stage very well,and I loved the ending.
11/02/07
This was a very nicely written story.
Laury
11/03/07
Sweet story!

I wish you'd established the setting a bit earlier--I kept readjusting mentally as new details were revealed.

Some parts of this were more "telling" than "showing"--maybe something to work on?

All in all, I enjoyed learning about this lovely and compassionate family.
11/06/07
Truly a wonderful story. How some people actually put into practice the things learned in Sunday School. Good telling and good writing.
I liked your writing very much. I was wishing (as I was reading it) that I could write more like that. I could put myself in the setting. Very good.