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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Fellowship (among believers) (10/11/07)

TITLE: Drama Girls, Giggles & A Prop Named Schnitzel
By LauraLee Shaw
10/12/07


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The drama girls at the church women’s retreat each year were crazy. A talented group of ladies, I must say, but crazy indeed.

I watched them on stage two years ago—7 different actresses. They were FUNNY! Then last year, there were maybe 11 or 12 of them. Every time they entered a room, the shy people scattered, while others seemed to enjoy their uninhibited demeanors.

Much to my surprise, when I showed up at the retreat again this year, most of those crazy girls were still there, performing away, as well as a few newbies. They seemed kind of close, but I wondered if it was just part of their “act.”

Nonetheless, I was curious about them, so while they were on stage rehearsing, I sneaked to their cabin just to take a peek. I had never seen anything so CRAZY in my life!

Covering the walls were photos--them together at each other’s houses and snapshots of their character parts over the years. Layered throughout the pictures were scriptural reminders of serving the Lord and His joy and such. Bold costumes and strange looking props surrounded the space--wild wigs and the most interesting snacks I’d ever seen.

As I brushed on some bumbleberry blue eye shadow out of a heart-shaped container in the bathroom, I heard laughter just outside the door.

Not knowing where else to go, I thrust myself behind their whacky shower curtain as swiftly as I could. I had to spy, though, still curious about those crazy drama girls.

It was a blonde---the new one, and that brunette who always played the off-beat Saturday Night Live character. Oh, she’s funny, I thought.

They began to tiptoe around and giggle. What is that scary looking ragged doll in their hands, and where are they putting it? I asked myself. What did she call it? “Sizzle”?

It was a creepy clown with a plastic face, like the old-fashioned freak movie ones.

I was mesmerized beyond belief…Had I become the crazy one?

Moments later, the rest of the girls walked in except for the director lady. (She was always running around busy, busy, as if the skits were the most important part of the whole weekend.)

As I squinted to hear, they were in some sort of discussion about marriage and family and stuff. Huh. I’d never seen them so serious before, especially the REALLY crazy one that was always casted as different bizarre characters with fake eyelashes.

Three were on the lower bunk sitting criss-cross, and the rest were on the floor surrounding. Their authenticity surprised me for a bunch of stage people.

Wouldn’t you know, the drama director flew through the door and interrupted that beautiful moment with her own tears? All of them questioned her sympathetically as she spilled out all of her stress. It had finally gotten to her.

Then they were all crying. One of them offered up a prayer, and by the “Amen,” the tears had turned to giggles again. All was well among the crazy drama girls. The show could go on!

It was most definitely time for me to get out of there, but I was in a pickle. LITERALLY, the shower curtain had a pickle on it. Go figure.

About that time, the director was getting ready for bed while several of the others were in the corner snacking and hem-hawing away. When she pulled back her fluffy corduroy comforter, out flew a shrill scream that I’m certain was heard across the whole camp.

That ugly clown was posed obnoxiously on her pillow, as if crying out “Na-na-na-na-boo-boo!”

“Schnitzel! Who put Schnitzel in my bed?!?” the director lady shrieked with her palms over her chest. The cackling in the corner erupted into an all out fit of hysterics, and it was the perfect time to make my escape.

As I walked all the way back to my own bunker, I thought I could still hear the laughter roaring. Crazy girls. And a creepy clown. NAMED SCHNITZEL!!!! While letting out my own giggle, I couldn’t help but wish I were a part of that team. Their fellowship was not staged at all: It was real….sweet even.

If by some chance I find myself strolling past that outlandish cabin next year, I’ll definitely have to knock. And maybe, just maybe, I’ll find the courage to introduce myself to Schnitzel.

Romans 15:32
“so that by God’s will I may come to you with joy and together with you be refreshed.”


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Debbie Wistrom10/18/07
I enjoyed this change of pace very much.
Laury Hubrich 10/18/07
This sounds like it was a fun adventure to write about.
Laury
c clemons10/20/07
I agree with the previous comment if you enjoyed writing about this then bravo! It kind of had a "you had to be there" feel to it. I don't think you need "casted" for cast. It was on topic, keep writing.
Peter Stone10/22/07
Amusing behind the scenes glimpse into the fellowship that occurs within a group when they take their masks off and just be themselves.
Joy Faire Stewart10/23/07
You made me want to get to know this fun-loving group.
Joanne Sher 10/23/07
Love the voice, Laura. Delightful descriptions - I felt like I was right there.
Jan Ackerson 10/23/07
Cute, clever--I just felt a bit uneasy about the eavesdropping, but that's probably just me. Love the title!
Kristen Hester10/23/07
I enjoyed this cute look at a fun group of girls. It was nice to know that though they were crazy and fun, they also had real, deep fellowship. Good job.

My only critique: I didn't quite understand who the "drama girls" were at first. I thought this was just a nick name for some girls who were dramatic (I'm all about the drama, so I'm familiar with such nick names). I finally figured out that they were actually the group who put on the dramas during the week, right? (Forgive, I'm slow. I may have been the ONLY one unclear at first). Anyway, for me perhaps a little more explanation of WHO the girls were at first might have helped.

GREAT WRITING!
Cheryl Harrison 10/23/07
The "fly on the wall" flavor of this story is a creative way to write about the topic of fellowship. In reality, many people find themselves on the outside looking in. The fellowship that your character witnesses reveals an authenticity that many people are looking for. Your descriptions had me right there ... I thought the "in a pickle" situation was cute. Still wondering how she got out of there without being seen. I enjoyed it. Blessings to you as you write for Him. :o)
Tim Pickl10/24/07
Thanks Laura! This sounds like a chapter of a book -- your story makes me curious to know more about the crazy group you admire! Of course, my favorite part was,
"It was most definitely time for me to get out of there, but I was in a pickle. LITERALLY, the shower curtain had a pickle on it. Go figure."
Blessings to you -- you are definitely 'write brained'!
Sheri Gordon10/25/07
I really like this story. Maybe because I've been to women's retreats and understand the "clique" thing. I thought you did a good job of showing the MC's misperception of the women, and the close friendships women can have. Very nice job with the topic.