The Official Writing Challenge
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10/11/07
How I LOVE the way you drew us in to the character of several people and brought it into one message at the close. That is the church, local and around the world. This is one great piece of art!
I love the little glimpse into everyone's different lives as they come together as one. I also feel like just watching God's creation is a form of worshiping.
10/11/07
They came from all walks of life, yet Life was the greatest call of all.. Very good imagery, I could even hear the surf. Oh wait, thats outside my window.. :)
10/13/07
Excellent descriptions - and I love all the little "snapshots" of each person coming for worship. Lovely.
10/14/07
Very good. I wanted to walk up to this church building along with all the others!!! What a wonderful place to worship!
Laury
10/14/07
The sound of the bell was a marvelous device that unified several mini-stories and appealed to your readers' senses, all at the same time.

I was stopped for a moment by the name "Terri" which seemed like a girl's name to me (with the "i").

Wonderful first entry--welcome to the challenge!
10/15/07
I liked how you captured another form of worship. Good entry.
You definitely have the gift of the pen. So glad you joined the challenge!
Very nice. I enjoyed all the litte instances of people being drawn to worhip by the church bells. Well done, and welcome.
10/17/07
You did a great job describing the little chapel. I could easily see it's shape and setting. The characterizations of the people who attended the chapel were well defined, too. I really enjoyed reading your first entry, and I hope it will be the first of many. It's a beautiful first entry!
10/17/07
Wow. God's creation found its way into the hearts of those behind the walls of wood and glass. Your descriptions are wonderful. God job.