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My mind is full of storm images ... which is what I imagine you were after with this poem. I also have picked up on the concept of God as a refuge or escape. The rhyming pattern is perfect, and the title is the top of a pyramid, directing the entire text back to it. Excellent.
I had to read this twice it was so good! I like the rhythm, and the rhyme. Great word choices. Don't know why "eye" is capitalized in the second stanza, but other than that, it's wonderful.
Stanza 1 and 2 are very good, a little reworking in the 3 as well as 4 but stanza 5 was good. Overall good job.
I like how you used the eye of the storm to represent calm -- very good word picture.

The meter could use a little tightening -- but otherwise this is quite good.