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09/14/07
I like the ending.
09/16/07
Great story!

I wasn't clear what the makeup had to do with it...and since Robert Blake is the name of a famous actor, I'd suggest maybe a name change for your character--for a moment, I thought this story was about the actor.

I like your style, and your characters were memorable.
09/17/07
I like this story -- lots of hope. One thing, though: Gang members usually can't just leave a gang w/o something bad happening to them. To go on and lengthen your story you could write about the problems he faces getting out of the gang. Just a thought...
Laury
09/17/07
Liked the ending, though it seems unlikely that the stranger would give the full name of the last person he talked to about Christ. I agree that there needs to be more of a struggle as he gives up drugs and quits the gang. It makes it seem as though, overnight, everything became rosey. Former prostitutes have a lot of issues to deal with after they come to Christ. Many go to counselors for a good while to forgive themselves. God heals our past, but there are scars.