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Nice job of reminding us how selfish we can be and how words really can hurt. I like how you showed the change of heart this would make a nice longer article.
wow that was a little real for me. the dialogue and internal dialogue was accurate in my book. I think you definitely captured a moment there- and nice job with the theme. good job.
09/16/07
Nicely done, a twist on the typical "surprise party" story.

I think you could have ended it after "Love beat her every time." What a great line!
09/19/07
Very realistic dialog in this wonderful story! I really like the way your character had that still small Voice talking to her while she was taking her bath. It's hard to argue with God because He already knows our inner thoughts and we can't fool Him with our words. This is good!