The Official Writing Challenge
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I wish it were that simple all the time. Keep writing. chris x
09/02/07
You created a great sense of urgency.

I did get a little confused in the dialog, but it wouldn't take much to correct that. Also, let me feel her pain a bit more. I want to be in the trunk with her.

Wonderful job.