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Wow! You told a very sad personal story so well. What a gift you have in the telling.
Very heart wrenching and well written. chris x
What a beautiful piece. So heartwarming, but sad. Wonderful that you could write with such love.
Beautifully written. Only God can give this kind of peace.
What a sad story with, nevertheless, a sweet ending. Such a loss, but such a hope! Very touching!

You used excellent descriptive words and phrases that helped me see everything that happened. One of my favorites was "The words played through my mind like a cruel storyline in which the actress must practice the part repeatedly until she gets it right. If I say it enough, if I speak with just the right inflection, this gigantic lump of terror sitting heavily on my heart would dissolve."

This is good writing, my friend! :) Thank you for sharing this personal piece with us!
There are so many wonderful things about this tender and touching story but the one that stands out to me is the way God spoke to you and gave you peace. I've heard that voice, too, many years ago, and it still speaks and brings peace to me today. Blessings to you and your little one who waits in heaven.
Thank you for sharing such a sad time. I was there in the room with you. God bless you for opening your heart and letting us get a peak.
What an awesome testimony of faith in times of crisis. thank you for sharing your pain, and hope.
I, like you and Loren know that voice of peace as well. Your story touched my heart and I have tears in my eyes. Your descriptive words and phrases held me to the end.
What can I say? A beautifully written and moving tribute to your son.

You captured the topic in an extraordinary way.

You are a gifted writer and have a wonderful way with words. May God bless you in a very special way for sharing this story that is sure to deeply touch each person who reads it.
You are a gifted writer. I am inspired by YOUR words and attitude. This is AWESOME. Our GOD is AWESOME. Thank you for sharing this. Congrats on your win. It is very well deserved!
I haven't read all tne entries in level 2, but I am sure you deserve the win. I rejoice with you that although little David is not with you here, you will see him again. Good job and I know it will bless others.
Congratulations on this wonderful writing and its well-deserved placing. I continue to look forward to more of your writings.
Simply beautiful, Laurie. One day, you'll see him again, and what a wonderful day that will be! I love the hope you wrote into your story, and the way you surrendered the future, no matter what it held, to the Lord.
Congratulations on your winning entry!
Congratulations on your well-deserved win. Not only did you tell a heart-wrenching (I'm still crying!) story, but you did it in excellent "format"; the spacing, the mechanics all worked to make it easily readable, which is important in any story. You touched my heart and reminded me how God has promised to always be there, especially in the darkest times that don't end as we would like. I know you can't wait to see your precious son again!
This entry brought tears too my eyes. What a heart wrenching story, but with a clear message of hope. Very well written.
CONGRATULATIONS, LAURIE!!!!!!! :D I am so glad you won first place with this wonderfully-written story! WAY TO GO!!
CONGRATS on your 3rd place EC, as well, Laurie! You richly deserved it! :)
Congrats on your EC win.
God bless.
Congratulations on your EC -- very much deserved. This is excellent writing. You did a really good job of bringing your emotions, your turmoil, to the reader. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Congrats on a very well deserved win, about a very sad but inspiring story. We lost our first two grandchildren to miscarriage, and though it is not quite the same, I could feel the emotions richly because of the grief any life doesn't last long enough for us to embrace. Thanks for sharing from your heart and life...