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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Confused (08/16/07)

TITLE: Labyrinth of the Mind
By christine bastow
08/21/07


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Labyrinth of the Mind

Captured by the wind, Ephilia wandered through the trees entranced by the sound of the leaves that seemed to whisper, while soft airless fingers pulled her deeper and deeper toward the heart of the forest.
Her velvet slippers were muddy, her robe torn and her hair was in disarray.
Confused and disoriented she stumbled onward, moving further and further into darkness as the density of the trees slowly swallowed up the light from the sun.
Stopping at a small stream and drinking down the sweet cool water, she sat back and lent against a large tree allowing herself to catch her breath. “I just need to close my eyes for a second” she thought, but dozed off immediately.
Awoken by an unusual sound, Ephilia jumped up in panic and was surprised to see that it was almost dark.
Shadows of the night started to appear and sounds from far away began to play on her mind. The sounds were distant but familiar, and as she tried to concentrate she became fearful of what or who they might be.
Puzzled as to where she was and where she might be going, Ephilia began to lose all hope and her spirit began to wane.

“Where loosing her” said the Doctor
“Come on Ephilia, stay with us” stated the nurse.


Suddenly in another place Ephilia was on a lake in a small boat, with mountains all around and large fluffy clouds floating by. Birds were flying over and she could see animals or maybe people on the faraway shores.
“What a beautiful place” she whispered to herself.
But once again Ephilia was bewildered as to where she was and how she had gotten there.
Suddenly, there was movement in the water as a large monster like creature came up from the depths of the lake, tipping the boat and throwing Ephilia out.
Pain surged through as she hit her head on the side of the boat and landed in the icy mountain water.
She began to sink deeper and deeper as her lungs filled with fluid. Her arms and legs were paralyzed as she watched the surface disappear. Baffled as to what was happening to her, Ephilia lost the will to live and began to drown.


“She’s not breathing” said the Doctor
“Breathe, breathe, come on Ephilia, just breathe” Said the nurse as she began to pump her lungs.

Ephilia began to choke at first, and then as that passed she took a rugged breath and carried on breathing.

Then…..there were colors, lots of colors all around and rainbows and blue bunnies and red trees and…… “Where am I”? Thought Ephilia, who was now mystified as to what was happening to her.
The grass was purple, the sky was green, the river orange…. How weird….

A storybook she had once read came to mind, and she realized that she was actually a part of it.
But then it all changed into monsters and demons chasing Ephilia as she fled for her life.

Then the fitting began, and wouldn’t stop.

The drip was in place, the oxygen mask over her nose and mouth.
Hour after hour the doctors and nurses worked to save her.

Was Ephilia to come out of this alive?

Furthermore if she did, would she be the same person as before she took that pill.

Drugs destroy lives


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LaNaye Perkins08/24/07
What a powerful message you wove into this piece. Great writing!
Dee Yoder 08/25/07
I was just wandering AND wondering through this story right along with your MC, confused and dazed as she. But the twist at the end brought everything into focus, and I realized what a good writer you are! I was absorbed in this story from beginning to end.
Betty Overstreet08/25/07
WOW what an excellent writer you are..you certainly had me wondering where the story line was taking me.
Martha Ford08/25/07
Outstanding use of topic as well as a valuable lesson. Your descriptions are vivid and as I read I found my heart racing: I HAD to read that story. Congratulations!
Helen Murray08/26/07
You had me properly confused until the last line clarified all! Well done.
Jacquelyn Horne08/28/07
An all-true story too many times, I fear. You told it well.
David Butler 08/30/07
I thought this was an abstract fantasy when I first started reading, thinking you were painting surrealist word images. Then the dialogue between the hospital staff made me pay closer attention, drawing me on to a powerful but tragic conclusion. Well done!
You may want to work on the paragraph spacing and editing a bit more, but hey, you got what it takes.
Joanne Sher 08/30/07
You are very talented. I felt like I was right there with your MC, as confused as she was. Your last line is simple, but AMAZINGLY powerful.