The Official Writing Challenge
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08/24/07
Nice story!

There were a few possessives missing their apostrophes and some other minor quibbles--nothing to detract from the overall effect of this story.

Your MC's conflict is well-presented and the reader is satisfied at the end.
A very good story. I like it when God helps us come to our senses!
08/24/07
It's certainly difficult to put our words into actions and truly give of ourselves. You've shown that beautifully here.

I love your descriptive passages as well.
08/25/07
A well written story, and you had me very interested in what happens to the boy and the couple. You created very vivid images with your descriptions, also!
08/26/07
Great illustration of how we do battle with the tough questions.
08/28/07
Your description of the serenity of the beach at the beginning of your story was a good contrast to the confusion Richard felt over what to do with the boy. (I'm glad he made the choice he did.) Your lesson can be applied to a lot of situations. Well done.
You covered the topic well. I like the way you resolved the confused issue. I enjoyed also your description of the setting.
08/29/07
Great writing - you had me right in the middle of all of it. Much to think about too.
08/29/07
This makes 3 boxes of kleenex today! I loved this piece. Great writing with your heart!
08/29/07
I like your title, and loved the opening sentence. This was great, you showed a realistic struggle between the MC, etc and resolved it quite nicely in the end with a very realistic reaction from Caleb concerning what would soon be his dinner. ^_^ Good job.
08/29/07
Tough wife! But a good lesson wrapped in a great package. Nice work.
09/03/07



Trevas,
The beach description was very good, but it was the moral of the story that spoke most strongly. I immediately related to a similar situation a close friend encountered. God guided him to make a wise decision also. Gene Hudgens