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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Confused (08/16/07)

TITLE: DAD IN THE GAP
By Paul Potenza
08/18/07


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DAD IN THE GAP

When I was a little girl I met a very strange and charming man.

He married my mother but I had a crush on him.

At ten years old I tried to express that to him and my mom got jealous...I could'nt figure it out.

My new dad set me straight. He took me alongside and said, "I am the father, your mom is the mother and you are the daughter." He made it as clear as crystal what my role was.

Not many things in my life have ever been as clear.

At sixteen years old I fell for a soldier. He reminded me a lot of dad. I ran off to marry him while dad was in Beirut.

Dad was a Marine.

It ended in divorce even though dad thought a lot of the guy. I was unhinged.

I married my next husband without much input from either of my parents. He was a hippie and unfortunately, he beat me. When I finally had the nerve to tell dad, I had to plead with him not to come and take the guy apart. That's the only part of that whole bewildering relationship that I remember clearly. Everything else is a fog.

Now I am married to an Army Corpsman. We are having a lot of trouble because I don't think that I love him. I'm befuddled. He seems like a nice guy but to be honest he can be a real handfull. Dad has met him and he likes him well enough but dad has liked two of the three that I've married too.

I don't want to go through life like this. I want to be happy.

I want someone like dad.

I know that I have dad because we talk almost every day, but I can't "have" dad. I know that it sounds silly but I wonder if there are any more men out there like him. I've tried all the different venues and I can't find anyone who fits the bill.

Where are the men who will stand in the gap for their wives... who'll take out the garbage and still find the time to help the kids with their math? Is there any man left who doesn't mind changing diapers?...Who actually LIKES it? and when they're done with that, can still make mom feel special and loved?

You'd love my dad.


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Jacquelyn Horne08/24/07
This leaves me feeling like there is a lot of confusion still in the mc's life. I really hope this is not a true account.
c clemons08/24/07
Well I'm confused after reading your article. The first sentence said "you met a strange and charming man" Was he strange because he was the first man that treated you decent?" Didn't get the title either. Is dad in the gap until the real man for the MC shows up? As I said, I'm confused. To Freudian for me.
Dee Yoder 08/25/07
Not sure I fully understand your story, but I encourage you to talk to your pastor, if this story is real, before making any more decisions about your marriage!
Helen Murray08/26/07
I can relate a lot to this article. What "writer" is missing is time to slow right down and get wisdom. It's found in scripture and covers every part of living. Perhaps the following chapters might tell the story of how this happens?
Marita Vandertogt08/29/07
I like your writing style. You create an open dialogue that's easy to follow and keeps the readers interest.
Good job.
Mark Bell08/29/07
Like changing diapers? Surely, you jest. But, yes lots of real men change them.

After that, it's very real, and very open. Heart touching, as well.
Marilyn Schnepp 02/26/08
I could be wrong, but, methinks this is a true story of perhaps one of your daughters...and her sad tale of woe, when it comes to choosing a husband; and all little girls have a crush on their daddy's (I know) and grow up searcing for a duplicate - but never find one! They always fall short, somehow. Good job, my friend!
Marilyn Schnepp 07/14/10
Pauly, I just put (my name) in the Address Bar - out of curiosity; and you'll never believe what popped up? THIS, your story!! with my comment! Amazing, eh? Anyway, I reread this and again...Love your style of writing. Great writer Pauly, don't give up the talent that's within you. Semper Fi