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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Angry (08/02/07)

TITLE: Bonnie Bunny Searches For a Friend
By Seema Bagai
08/08/07


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Bonnie Bunny watched as her brothers and sisters hopped toward the meadow.

“You can’t come with us. You’re too little and you don’t hop fast enough,” Bruce Bunny told her. “Stay here on the farm.”

Bonnie was irate. She didn’t like being left behind while everyone else had fun.

“I wonder if anybody will play with me,” she thought. She bounced over to the pond where the ducks gathered.

“Will you play with me, please?” Bonnie questioned the ducks.

“You can’t swim with us. You don’t have webbed feet,” Darius Duck said. He held up his foot for her to see.

Bonnie was furious. She headed toward the barn. On the way, she met Sheila Sparrow.

“Sheila, will you play with me, please?” Bonnie inquired.

“You can’t fly with me. You don’t have wings,” Sheila said. She spread her wings and flew away. Bonnie was cross.

In the barn, she found Harmon Horse munching on some hay.

“Harmon, will you play with me, please?” Bonnie requested.

“Sorry, I can’t play with you. I’m too old to run around outside with a young rabbit,” Harmon said.

Bonnie was irritated. She bounded across the barn to find Carrie Cat.

“Carrie, will you play with me, please?” Bonnie appealed.

“I have to stay here and watch my kittens. They are too young to be left alone,” Carrie said, licking her paws.

Bonnie was bothered by not being able to find anybody to play with in the barn. She scampered outside and over to the pigpen.

“Pierre, will you play with me, please?” Bonnie wondered.

“I can’t leave the pen. The gate is locked. You know, you are lucky you aren’t stuck in here,” Pierre said.

Bonnie was annoyed. She liked being able to hop around, but it was lonely without anyone to play with. She was running out of choices.

Ginah Goose sat next to Pierre’s pen. Bonnie scuttled over to her.

“Ginah, will you play with me, please?” Bonnie pleaded.

“I can’t leave my eggs. I have to sit here until they hatch. Why don’t you find Lucie? I think she’s on the hill behind the barn,” Ginah said.

Bonnie was not pleased, but thanked Ginah and scurried to find Lucie Lamb.

“Lucie, will you play with me, please?” Bonnie implored.

“Sure, I’ll play with you, Bonnie. Let’s see who can leap the highest.”

Bonnie was thrilled that she finally found a friend. She and Lucie played, leaping and springing on the hill. When they were tired, they giggled and munched on grass. They played until dinnertime.

Back in the Bunny Burrow, Bruce apologized to his sister. “Bonnie, we are all sorry we didn’t let you come with us. You can join us tomorrow.”

Bonnie smiled. “No, thank you. I’m going to spend the day with my new friend, Lucie Lamb. Maybe the day after tomorrow.”


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Rita Garcia08/10/07
This needs to be illustrated and published! A delightful and fun read!
Jacquelyn Horne08/10/07
Very cute! Children will love this.
Marilyn Schnepp 08/12/07
Cute story but not exactly an "angry story"; however, very good for kids. An illustrated book perhaps? Nice.
Joy Faire Stewart08/12/07
This is adorable and a fun read. Good job!
Dee Yoder 08/14/07
This is an adorable children's story. It was so pleasant to read. I could imagine the animals very clearly.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/14/07
I could feel myself turning the pages for a new picture to represent each animal in this delightful children's story. I loved, too, all the different synonyms for "angry."
Joanne Sher 08/14/07
Cute and fun! This would be a lovely picture book for sure.
Betty Castleberry08/15/07
Charming. It begs for illustrations. Well done.
Kristen Hester 08/15/07
This is an adorable children's story. I loved all the names. It's a perfect read-out-loud story!
LaNaye Perkins08/15/07
This is a wondeful story to tell children to help them learn how to cope with disappointment. Great job!
Loren T. Lowery 08/15/07
Nice story on perseverance, and a keeping a positive attitude. The use of the animals made it very enjoyable, especially for children.
Catrina Bradley 08/15/07
Very nice children's story. I love the alliterative names, and the lesson to keep trying and not sit and stew in your anger.
Patty Wysong08/15/07
I loved the names of the animals!! As I read I wondered about her anger level DEcreasing at each negative response instead of INcreasing, but maybe that was to set things up so she could play with Lucie without being too angry? Your descriptions were enough that I could see each page as it turned--I really, really enjoyed this. :-) Hugs!!
Dee Yoder 08/16/07
Yay, Seema! A great entry for you. I really enjoyed this winning story!
Sara Harricharan 08/16/07
Cute! You have a knack for writing adorable children's stories! I could see this illustrated with gilt-edged pages for a kid's room. ^_^ Congrats on your placing (I'd better see you in advanced now-lol) and excellent writing! The short sentences and expressions were so fun.


   
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