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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Angry (08/02/07)

TITLE: Icing On The Cake
By RuthAnn Cornelson
08/08/07


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ďNo new messages,Ē again, says my screen.
I really had hoped that I might have seen
Some comments from Faithwriters for me.
But itís OK, Iím not angry,
Well, a little, I guess, although
disappointed maybe better describes
This churning feeling I have inside.

Again, no one has reviewed my story
and it almost makes me sorry
that I work so hard to write
but I get no comments, despite
all the effort I put in,
and Iím sure that my story could win.
I've read the other entries, and I find
none that are so much better than mine.

I am a tiny bit angry Iíll admit,
Last week I even decided to quit,
But I thought Iíd try one more time,
And yes, I would like some cheese with my whine.
Still, I do think I have legitimate cause
To have the writing loser blahs.

Don't let the sun go down on your anger, God said,
So I have to get over it before I go to bed.
Hey really, itís all OK,
I'm sure I'll win another day,
or week,
but that doesn't rhyme,
and although a poem doesn't have to rhyme
all the time,
I like rhyming poetry the best,
but I think that like many of the rest
of the things I like to write and read,
many others won't agree with me.

I'll try not to be angry
because the sun soon will go down,
and by then my anger has to be gone.
So GET OVER IT, I say,
PUT A SMILE ON YOUR FACE
I'm sure that sometime soon Iím bound to place!
Or not, itís really hard to say.

Oh, look! I just got another review as I speak.
Iíll go to Faithwriterís and have a peek,
A second review for my story on sad!
Two reviews, thatís really not so bad.
Itís not that great, of course,
But it certainly could be worse,
And has been.

Many times Iíve just had one,
And some weeks Iíve even gotten none.
But then, I really just write my stories for fun,
Any comments are just icing on the cake
Itís all about sharing the things we create.
Well, look at that, the sunís almost gone
And now my anger is pretty much done.

But now I've gone and gotten stuck
In the rut
of speaking in rhyme
all of the time.
I have to find some way
To stop rhyming everything I say,
I think I better just stop right now,
So, Iíll just end by saying
Ciao


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Marilyn Schnepp 08/12/07
I'm with you all the way, my friend! 200 writers enter the Challenge...but only one or two and sometimes a few (I rhymed!(*.*)) take the time to comment!! I can empathize wholeheartedly! Wow! The anger does grow day by day and week by week. Thanks for such a cute little rhyming way for anger management. Nice job!
c clemons08/12/07
I agree it is very disheartening not to get comments when we think we have done a good job, if not a very good job and not one comment. You said a lot in this poem, all very true, but the poem does not flow very well and I don't know if you were just trying to get your thoughts out, or really meant to have a sincere entry. At any rate you are heard! Keep writing.
Jacquelyn Horne08/12/07
Been there. Done that. And will probably be there again.
Jan Ackerson 08/15/07
Hey there--just popping in to ask if you know about the "hinting" threads on the message boards. You'll get a lot more comments if you pop in there on Mondays after your entry is posted. Feel free to PM me for more details, if you wish.

I'm sorry your lack of comments has been difficult for you...hope this helps a bit. Your poem is a clever little rant, and I can definitely see your talent!
Seema Bagai 08/16/07
Great poem. Everyone around here can relate to this.
Joanne Sher 08/17/07
Congratulations, RuthAnn. Your entry has placed 14th in Level 2. The Lists for the Top 15 in each Level and the Top 40 overall are available in the Weekly Results and Highest Rankings forum of our Faithwriters Message Boards.
Dee Yoder 08/21/07
Hey, Ruthann, I know how you feel! I hope you are a "hinter" about your work on the message boards. You will draw more attention to your work every week. I am one who tries to read them all, but when I can't, I will definitely read the hints and bricks on Mondays and Wednesdays, so hit me over the head with a brick on your next Challenge and I'll be sure to find you! You wrote a cute poem that certainly strikes at the heart of every FW!
Jeanette Oestermyer 08/30/07
I love the rhyming here, not exactly a scheme, but it works no less. Good job on this one.