The Official Writing Challenge
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08/12/07
Great title. Good story, but hard to follow. Story went from 1st person telling her story to 3rd person narrator. Couple of misspelled words I think you meant "allowed" instead of "aloud". Keep working on it and it can be great story.
Good story on forgiveness and anger. I was glad it worked out for Lisa & Steven.
Infidelity is probably one of the hardest things to forgive, but it must be done. I'm glad your MC was able to find that place of forgiveness.
08/21/07
With a little polish, your story can shine. It has an important message and characters that the reader can care about. The ending is a good one that offers hope to marriages that have experienced this terrible betrayal.